Sentence #1

Before: When people have grown up, become adults, they will have needed to learn how the stick a pin in it, so to speak.

After: When people become adults, they will have learned to stick a pin in it, so to speak.

Sentence #2

Before: Society needs to recognize that something may not be quite right and then it needs to start looking for a solution to the problem instead of taking the easy way out and accept this as the new way of life.

After: Society needs to own up to their problems and then they need to start looking for a solution; it may not be the easiest route, but it’s better than giving in and accepting this as a new way of life.

Sentence #3

Before: It becomes a problem when it is integral and when it is in excess.

After: It becomes a problem when it is integral and in excess.

Sentence #4

Before: That all being said, it is definitely not a positive to be connected all the time, twenty-four/seven.

After: That being said, it is definitely not a positive to be connected twenty-four/seven.

Sentence #5

Before: In all seriousness, though, digital distraction is a serious issue. It has taken lives and it will take many more.

After: In all seriousness, digital distraction is a relevant issue that has taken many lives.